Sunday, October 30, 2011

Glimpse

Carved crooked grin.
caught flickering light
bloody image of wine bottle
smashed on sidewalk
thump of head, death gurgle
as someone's son died in gutter.
Image vanished fast as it came.
just a jack-o-lantern
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11 comments:

  1. MaryOctober 30, 2011 at 3:45 PM

    Wonderful! What a relief that it was just a jack-o-lantern!

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  2. NankaOctober 31, 2011 at 2:33 AM

    Whew! That was so near to being frightful!! Liked the twist in the last line!!

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  3. flaubertOctober 31, 2011 at 9:13 AM

    Victoria, I like the twist also. Nicely done.

    Pamela

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  4. Mike PatrickOctober 31, 2011 at 10:01 AM

    A frightful situation needing only light. Great.

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  5. AnonymousOctober 31, 2011 at 11:19 AM

    Victoria, this chilled me right to the bone. So much scarier than Halloween - the real thing, and it happens every day of the year. Very effective use of the Wordle - you handled those words like puzzle pieces. Can't believe the sheer economy of your usage of that many words in this poem~ Amy
    http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/10/31/lost-soul-sun-whirl/

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  6. gautami tripathyNovember 1, 2011 at 9:02 AM

    So tightly written!

    innards

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  7. Judy RoneyNovember 1, 2011 at 2:49 PM

    Oh my, Victoria. How frightening and then, it's just a jack-o-lantern. Great Halloween poem!

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  8. brenda wNovember 2, 2011 at 3:11 PM

    What a surprise! It was not what I expected, and I loved the twist. Great contribution, thanks. :)

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  9. AnonymousNovember 4, 2011 at 7:07 AM

    A scary piece of writing with a great twist at the end.
    I was impressed how you fitted the wordle words into such a short piece of writing - very clever.

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  10. Maxwell Mead Williams Robinson BarryNovember 5, 2011 at 7:18 PM

    very powerful take on the wordle.
    well done.

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  11. PeggyNovember 16, 2011 at 10:55 AM

    I know I read this one before but must not have commented for some reason. This has such a neat depiction of the shadow of scary so much a part of Halloween.

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