Tuesday, November 3, 2015

Tranquility

After flash and crash of storm, 
tranquility hangs silent, perfect, 
a single shining raindrop caught
for one moment, gone the instant
squirrel shakes branch. Transient.
This poem was written for Poets United Midweek Motif, where the theme istranquility.
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38 comments:

  1. MaryNovember 4, 2015 at 3:54 AM

    Wow, just wow! You really captured something about tranquility here, Victoria. When it happens, it doesn't last long...but while it lasts it is oh-so-wonderful!

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  2. SusanNovember 4, 2015 at 4:03 AM

    I love the phrase "tranquility hangs silent." It always lasts just until we're shook up. The allegory works for me beautifully.

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  3. Sanaa RizviNovember 4, 2015 at 4:10 AM

    Gorgeous write :D :D

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  4. Jae RoseNovember 4, 2015 at 5:11 AM

    That damn squirrel! Although i can think of worse ways to be interrupted whilst having a tranquil moment - a lovely, crisp and sooting poem

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  5. AnonymousNovember 4, 2015 at 5:38 AM

    You got that right...tranquility is transient...very nicely done.

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  6. Gillena CoxNovember 4, 2015 at 6:21 AM

    reading this poem, is like a gasp of breath, you want to hold its essence, for a while before exhaling

    much love...

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    1. VictoriaNovember 4, 2015 at 6:36 PM

      Thanks. That's exactly what I wanted to do. Gasp of breath.

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  7. Buddah MoskowitzNovember 4, 2015 at 8:18 AM

    Wow, you zero in on the perfect detail, like a fine cinematographer. Excellent!

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  8. Sherry Blue SkyNovember 4, 2015 at 9:51 AM

    This is stunning. I love that single fat raindrop, so swiftly gone.

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  9. Purba chakrabortyNovember 4, 2015 at 10:38 AM

    This is amazing! You captured that delicate moment in your poem so perfectly.

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  10. PeggyNovember 4, 2015 at 11:11 AM

    You used words wonderfully in this. Great images that really convey tranquility.

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    1. VictoriaNovember 5, 2015 at 7:58 PM

      Thanks. Your tranquility poem also worked for me..

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  11. AnonymousNovember 4, 2015 at 11:36 AM

    Lovely.I really like the sounds in this verse.
    -HA

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  12. tonispencerNovember 4, 2015 at 12:30 PM

    that silent drop - a totally true Zen wow. Tranquility is transient for truth. I wanted to be in that drop for just that hanging moment.

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    1. VictoriaNovember 5, 2015 at 7:59 PM

      Thank you. WE all have so many hanging moments.

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  13. Old EggNovember 4, 2015 at 4:55 PM

    How beautiful to picture the scene you created.

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  14. humbirdNovember 4, 2015 at 5:19 PM

    Esp. after the storm, this contrast so deafening and beautiful in same time. Nice.

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  15. HannahNovember 5, 2015 at 7:14 AM

    Love the contrast between the two states of weather or metaphorically - being. Well done!

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  16. claireyloveNovember 5, 2015 at 7:16 AM

    Ahhh. yes ~ sometimes there has to be chaos to define that following moment of peace :)

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  17. Carol CampbellNovember 5, 2015 at 8:09 AM

    I am floored by the power of this poem! Marvelous!

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  18. J.N.T.November 5, 2015 at 1:57 PM

    oh the calm after a storm. it's true tranquility also when there's no tv blaring in the background and cars in the distance. just you and tranquility after a storm. :D

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  19. rallentandaNovember 6, 2015 at 1:38 AM

    The squirrels of life ruin everything.

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    1. VictoriaNovember 6, 2015 at 7:25 PM

      I don't know if they ruin everything or just change it.

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  20. IntelliblogNovember 10, 2015 at 9:24 PM

    How very zen, Victoria! Contemplation of that single raindrop as it about to fall seems to stop time and allow us, transient humans, contemplate infinity and the mystery of life! Well-penned!
    (PS: Thank you fro your wonderful comment on my poem. I felt as strongly as you when I wrote it and the thousands upon thousands of miserable stories of the refugees fill me with an immense sadness).

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