Tuesday, June 19, 2012

Permanent

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Lack cuts like dull rusty razor,
leaves ugly wound, jagged edges.
Abundance alone  heals nothing.
Forgiveness, trust, time work together
to heal poverty's injuries smooth,
Even then, faint silver scars remain.  

This was written for  Poets United Vice / Versa, a revived Poets United feature.  We are challenged to use two sets of antonyms in our writing.  The antonyms this time are jagged and smooth; lack and abundance. 

12 comments:

  1. I enjoyed this, Victoria. Indeed, lack DOES cut like a dull, rusty razor, and so true that abundance by itself heals nothing. Life is complex, solutions difficult. Your poem captured that idea well. Thanks for visiting other bloggers as well! Most appreciated.

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  2. Deep thoughts and lovely lines

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  3. Those scars are sometimes hard to conceal...and forget

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  4. "Forgiveness, trust, time"

    Three powerful healers of wounds. Some are so difficult though.

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  5. Excellent write and wise as well, Victoria! So very true.

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  6. I so love "forgiveness, trust, time...heal poverty's injuries smooth". Very lovely.

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  7. Forgive and forget, always a better alternative. Great write Victoria!

    Hank

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  8. Yes and there will always be something else to fight for

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  9. Sometimes no matter how much we want to forgive, yes, there is always a faint scar to remind. Very nice writing~!

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