Sunday, October 30, 2011

Glimpse

Carved crooked grin.
caught flickering light
bloody image of wine bottle
smashed on sidewalk
thump of head, death gurgle
as someone's son died in gutter.
Image vanished fast as it came.
just a jack-o-lantern

11 comments:

  1. Wonderful! What a relief that it was just a jack-o-lantern!

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  2. Whew! That was so near to being frightful!! Liked the twist in the last line!!

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  3. Victoria, I like the twist also. Nicely done.

    Pamela

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  4. A frightful situation needing only light. Great.

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  5. Victoria, this chilled me right to the bone. So much scarier than Halloween - the real thing, and it happens every day of the year. Very effective use of the Wordle - you handled those words like puzzle pieces. Can't believe the sheer economy of your usage of that many words in this poem~ Amy
    http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/10/31/lost-soul-sun-whirl/

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  6. Oh my, Victoria. How frightening and then, it's just a jack-o-lantern. Great Halloween poem!

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  7. What a surprise! It was not what I expected, and I loved the twist. Great contribution, thanks. :)

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  8. A scary piece of writing with a great twist at the end.
    I was impressed how you fitted the wordle words into such a short piece of writing - very clever.

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  9. very powerful take on the wordle.
    well done.

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  10. I know I read this one before but must not have commented for some reason. This has such a neat depiction of the shadow of scary so much a part of Halloween.

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